Are you freaking kidding me?! This dude was standing still and using conceal to hide, tracking so far? He’s standing there for a couple minutes and then suddenly a stick snaps under his boot! Now what’s wrong with this scenario? Obviously if he’s standing still, and has been for a couple minutes now, then how is there suddenly a stick under his boot!!? It’s just dumb! Then his enemy is able to “reach” a gadget despite being completely bound?! Then, after an EXTREMELY drawn out fight, he gets absolutely NOTHING!! Man F this story! There are a million different ways the author could have started that fight, yet he decided to just make something up regardless if it makes sense. This could be said for many of the other aspects of this story. All in all I give it a maybe. I hope it gets better! There is a lot of potential here.