Still great, a couple nitpicks

Not really much to say on the story itself, it’s still great and if you’ve gotten this far you know what you’re getting. I will say less Keira plot than I’d like.

So anyways, the nitpicks:

Chapters are split in parts – Why? When a chapter ends and you get “Part 2″, it feels like you’ve hit a major division in the book, because that’s ALWAYS how that is used. But not here, here’s it’s just chapter 3-part 2” every single time and it’s annoying.

On the narration:

A lot of voices sounds like they’ve got a bit of reverb on them in a lot of scenes it’s really annoying. It sounds like you WANT them to sound like they’re in a sound studio and it’s weird.

The background sounds in a lot of scenes are annoying as hell. Cut that crap out. Just these long running background noise tracks to add “ambiance” to a scene and it was such a relief everytime it stopped and the audio became blissfully clear again.